Some people get into debt by buying things they dont need and cant afford. what are the reasons for this behaviour? what action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem.
In
this
modern era, people
are attracting
to various things that are unnecessary for them and pushing them into the world of debt. Wrong verb form
attracted
This
issue becoming a headache for not only to
individuals but Change preposition
for
also
nations' economies. The consequences of this
are seem
very severe Change the verb form
seem
such
as ending life
to killing Add an article
a life
other
to get rid of the debt. The following paragraphs will discuss Correct pronoun usage
others
causes
of Correct article usage
the causes
this
as well as
what steps should be taken to avoid people
from getting into these problems.
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the first
peoples'
desire for buying expensive things is Change noun form
people's
on
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at
the
peak in Change the word
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comparison
last
four decades. Correct article usage
the last
However
, the income of crowd
has been in Correct article usage
the crowd
a
steady growth. Remove the article
apply
Therefore
, buying
items which are not necessary Change the verb form
to buy
people
are taking loan
from Add an article
a loan
the
companies at higher rate Correct article usage
apply
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of
intrest
, and Correct your spelling
interest
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similar
this
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it
are Correct pronoun usage
them
also
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fulfil
there
need. Correct your spelling
their
For instance
, the growth of purchasing cars not only in cities but also
in rural
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a rural
the rural
area
has Fix the agreement mistake
areas
increase
tremendously, ignoring the fact that, public transport is cheaper and safer way to travel. Change the verb form
increased
Secondly
, inadequate knowledge about personal finances has also
become major
issue in recent years, where everyone is focusing on Add an article
a major
show
off Change the form of the verb
showing
themselve
and being careless about Correct your spelling
themselves
financial
position.
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the financial
According to
many expert
in Change to a plural noun
experts
this
field,suggesting that if it not
controlled soon Add a missing verb
is not
people
will struggle in their life and to avoid these
, governments from Correct pronoun usage
this
the
different countries should put some strict laws on Correct article usage
apply
thhe
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the
people
while
applying for Add an article
a loan
the loan
loan
, Fix the agreement mistake
loans
also
banks should invistigate
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investigate
applicants
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applicants'
applicant's
background
before sanctioning any Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
loan
. Moreover
, government
should teach Add an article
the government
children's
about finance Change noun form
children
in
Change preposition
at
the
early age to prevent them from making any bad Correct article usage
an
desicion
in future. Adults should make Correct your spelling
decision
decisions
themselevs
aware Correct your spelling
themselves
about
how to handle money from Change preposition
of
todays
technology.
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today's
To sum up
, managing money is a serious problem in the recent world and ease with Add an article
the loan
a loan
loan
and the desire to show off is Fix the agreement mistake
loans
major
cause for it. Add an article
a major
the major
By introducing
new hard laws for loans and educating Change preposition
Introducing
people
at the
early age can be Correct article usage
an
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the solution
a solution
solution
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solutions
for
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