The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of tree types of tutrients, which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of tree types of tutrients, which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The Pie Charts illustrate the amount of taking three different types of harmful items which are
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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meals
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various
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of the day.
Overall
, the figure shows that breakfast contains less
sodium
, fat and artificial
sugar
than The Other types of meals.
However
,
dinner
is rich in
sodium
and fat,
whereas
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sugar
is mostly found in snack items. Beforehand, the first meal of the day is comparatively much
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healthier
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which contains 14% of
sodium
, 16% of fat and 16% of edit
sugar
.
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breakfast, snacks contain 14 % of
sodium
, it is high in fat which is 21% and auger which is 42%.
In contrast
,
dinner
is high in both
sodium
and fat which are 43% and 37% of total intake respectively.
Moreover
,
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is the second highest source of
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sodium
which is 29% and
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of
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fat which is 26%.
in addition
, lunch and
dinner
are two types of
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meals
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after breakfast which add
suger
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sugar
.
Finally
, it can be stated that in tee-time added suger is taken
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than other parts of the day.
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lunch and
dinner
, salty and fatty food are top of the list.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, sodium, dinner with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • balanced diet
  • overconsumption
  • health risks
  • cultural dietary patterns
  • processed foods
  • portion control
  • government regulations
  • nutrition education
  • informed choices
  • saturated fats
  • trans fats
  • carbohydrates
  • sodium intake
  • public health
  • nutrition labels
  • dietary guidelines
  • caloric content
  • food groups
  • obesity
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • diabetes
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