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More and more people move away from family and friends for working. Do the advanatages outweigh disadvantages

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Nowadays, one of the people to choose to move away from family and friends for working.
This
 essay will discuss that it has many benefits more than drawbacks. On the one hand, People will have more opportunities for careers when they move away from family
instead
 work in traditional work.
Furthermore
, their salary will get high as well.
Also
, of
course
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 when they have more money they can help their family's lives better.
On the other hand
, in fact, many people will face living alone.
In addition
, the expensive life experience will take them
stress
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 or become
to
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 depressed.
Consequently
, they will spend more money on their health problems
such
 as irregular eating, and no exercise. In conclusion, more away from family and friends have more competition to get a chance for work. In my opinion, that gives more advantages than disadvantages
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