The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs
illustrates
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illustrate
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the percentage of
people
born in
Australia
and outside of
Australia
during the period 1995, and 2005 living in
cities
, town and Rural
areas
. As per the graph when we compare the percentage of
people
living in
city
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cities
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, towns and Rural
areas
born in
Australia
and outside
Australia
during the period of 1995, we could see the percentage
people
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of people
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born outside
australia
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Australia
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living in
cities
and rural
areas
relatively higher;
whereas
the
People
born in
Austrlia
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Australia
living in Town is higher when compared with the statistics of
people
outside of
Australia
living in
rurla
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rural
areas
. The same during the period 2010 we could
obsever
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observe
observer
that the
people
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number of people
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born in
Australia
living in
Cities
is
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apply
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slightly increased but the
people
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number of people
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born
outid
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outside
of
Austrlaia
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Australia
living in
Cities
remain
same
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the same
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, and we could notice there is a drop compared to the year 1995 in
people
living in town and rural
areas
despite the fact that being born in
Australia
and
outiside
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outside
Australia
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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