some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sum of money that are out of proportion to the importance of work that they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement and what's your opinion.

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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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who
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work
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in
film
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the film
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industry
were
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paying
with
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crores of amount for 1 movie but health professionals,
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and other qualified persons were less paid for
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dedication towards their job. Nearly more than 10 times the payments received by celebrities. In below paragraphs explained about
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regarding professionals paid
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more.
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, every carrier
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their
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own importance and growth.
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who
well
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qualified
in
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engineers, doctors, teachers and other
employee
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employees
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doing well in their job but they were not happy with
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what
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they giving
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heartly
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heartily
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, during
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a pandemic
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situation in 2019, not only
doctor
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doctors
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and
nurse
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nurses
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other employees like cleaners, security guards and police officers
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worked almost more than 18 hours a day. They have sacrificed their family to take care
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of people
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people
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health but
government
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didn't
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their efforts and not even paid well for their dedication towards interest. Software developers were working day and night without any complaints to their managers as well private owners were working within the target dates for
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company
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company's
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succesful
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successful
and bringing them
in
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the upmost
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upmost
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marketing level but still some extent they were less paid
eventhogh
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even though
they are eligible for hard
works
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work
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.
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, I am agreeing with the statement
as
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provided by the
people
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.
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people
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should be paid
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of
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price for all professions.
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Celebrities
like
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a sports
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person,
film
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the film
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industry were paid with
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of amount for
there
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their
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work
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. Even though
by
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hard
work
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sacrificing some health these
people
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were totally eligible for getting huge
amount
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amounts
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movies
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in movies
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like bahubali, the main characters who played were not even agreed
for
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other projects until completed
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this movie shootings
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. For personality
aspects
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they have to maintain their proper diet and with lots of control
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daily routine. Another example I would like to give is
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sportsmen
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like cricketers , hardly they will sleep
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at least
6 hours and continues
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work
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out,
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making them pay higher.
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for
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every dedication in their
professional
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should be paid well. In summary, I am totally agreeing with the statement that celebrities were paying
lot
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than
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other professional
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another professional
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. If government
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any private owners respect their
employee
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employees
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and as per requirement
covering
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all timeliness
then
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should be paid more than what they
deserves
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