some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sum of money that are out of proportion to the importance of work that they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement and what's your opinion.
#people #workers #nurses #doctors #teachers #film #actors #company #bosses #sum #money #proportion #importance #work
Presently,
Add an article
an individual
the individual
individual
who Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
work
in Change the verb form
works
film
industry Add an article
the film
were
paying Change the verb form
was
with
crores of amount for 1 movie but health professionals, Change preposition
apply
army
and other qualified persons were less paid for Correct article usage
the army
there
dedication towards their job. Nearly more than 10 times the payments received by celebrities. In below paragraphs explained about Replace the word
their
statement
regarding professionals paid Add an article
the statement
as well as
more.
Firstly
, every carrier have
Change the verb form
has
their
own importance and growth. Correct pronoun usage
its
Add an article
An individual
The individual
Individual
who Fix the agreement mistake
Individuals
well
qualified Add a missing verb
are well
in
engineers, doctors, teachers and other Change preposition
as
employee
doing well in their job but they were not happy with Fix the agreement mistake
employees
efforts
Correct article usage
the efforts
what
they giving Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
heartly
. Correct your spelling
heartily
For example
, during pandemic
situation in 2019, not only Add an article
a pandemic
the pandemic
doctor
and Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
nurse
other employees like cleaners, security guards and police officers Fix the agreement mistake
nurses
were
worked almost more than 18 hours a day. They have sacrificed their family to take care Unnecessary verb
apply
Change preposition
of people
people
health but Change noun form
people's
government
didn't Add an article
the government
considered
their efforts and not even paid well for their dedication towards interest. Software developers were working day and night without any complaints to their managers as well private owners were working within the target dates for Change the verb form
consider
Correct article usage
the company
company
Change noun form
company's
succesful
and bringing them Correct your spelling
successful
in
Change preposition
to
Correct article usage
the upmost
upmost
marketing level but still some extent they were less paid Correct your spelling
utmost
eventhogh
they are eligible for hard Correct your spelling
even though
works
. Fix the agreement mistake
work
Hence
, I am agreeing with the statement as
provided by the Correct word choice
apply
people
. Thus
, people
should be paid lacks
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lack
of
price for all professions.
Change preposition
apply
Celebreties
like Correct your spelling
Celebrities
sports
person, Add an article
a sports
film
industry were paid with Correct article usage
the film
lacks
of amount for Fix the agreement mistake
lack
there
Correct your spelling
their
work
.
Even though by
hard Change preposition
apply
work
sacrificing some health these people
were totally eligible for getting huge amount
. Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
For example
, movies
like bahubali, the main characters who played were not even agreed Change preposition
in movies
for
other projects until completed Change preposition
to
this movie shootings
. For personality Change the determiner
this movie shooting
these movie shootings
aspects
they have to maintain their proper diet and with lots of control Add a comma
,aspects
in
daily routine. Another example I would like to give is Change preposition
over
sportsman
like cricketers , hardly they will sleep Fix the agreement mistake
sportsmen
atleast
6 hours and continues Correct your spelling
at least
work
out, Wrong verb form
working
practiced
making them pay higher. Wrong verb form
practising
Hence
, for
every dedication in their Change preposition
apply
professional
should be paid well.
In summary, I am totally agreeing with the statement that celebrities were paying Replace the word
profession
lot
Correct article usage
a lot
than
Correct quantifier usage
more than
other professional
. If government Change the wording
another professional
other professionals
as well as
any private owners respect their employee
and as per requirement Fix the agreement mistake
employees
covering
all timeliness Wrong verb form
cover
then
should be paid more than what they deserves
.Change the verb form
deserve
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