The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates food
consumption
in kilograms per
person
for each
year
of 5 different meals
such
as seafood, bread,
meat
, fruit and vegetables from 1950 to 2010 in Australia.
Overall
, all kinds of eating habits
were
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increased over time except
the
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meat
consumption
which
was
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decreased by more than 20
kg
per
person
per
year
.It was clear that the lowest consumed food was seafood and the highest consumed food was vegetables from 1950 to 2010. In 1950 random
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consume nearly 140 kilograms of vegetables after that between 1960 and 2000
this
amount fluctuated.
Finally
reached 160
kg
consumed per
year
for
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one citizen in 2010. Fruit
also
began with 80
kg
consumption
per
year
for each
person
in 1950 and after a slight dropped between 1960-1970, peaked
in
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140kg per
person
per
year
in 2010.
According to
the
graph
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bread peaked at 70kg
consumption
amount in 1970. Nearly 30 years of the period between 1950 to 1980, seafood showed a steady period. After that increased by turtle speed.
Meat
also
peaked in 1990 but suddenly started to fall. In 2010, an Australian citizen only consumed 80 kilograms of
meat
per
year
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, person, year, meat, kg with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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