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Climate change is a phenomenon that affects countries all over the world. Many people strongly believe that it is the responsibility of individuals, rather than corporations and government, to deal with this problem. To what extent do you agree?

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The pie charts show us how
people
 in two countries Germany and
Nigeria
finding
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find
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 out the news in a typical week. These diagrams provide different ways of getting information, though there are some similarities and differences. First of all, I would
like
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tolike
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 compare the biggest parts of
two
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 charts. As we can see
people
 in Germany
prefer
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 get news from
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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, practically half of the survey participants choose
this
 option. Despite that 63% of
people
 in urban areas in
Nigeria
 give preference to TV,
while
 the Germans prefer
this
 way of getting news only for 30%.
Secondly
, from these
charts
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 we can see some commons.
People
 in these two countries
are really do
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 not use
world
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the world
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 wild web
for
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to
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get
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getting
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some
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apply
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information. In
Germany
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,Germany
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 it is only 11% and in
Nigeria
 even less only 1%.
Overall
, it can be said that
people
 in
Nigeria
 trust television more, and Germans prefer to get information from newspapers most of all.
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