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an average of sales of selected food items (hot coffee, iced coffee, ice cream, soup, salad) during winter and summer at the Brisk cafe.

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This
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 graph illustrates an average of
sales
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 of selected food items (hot
coffee
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, iced
coffee
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, ice cream, soup, salad) during
winter
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 and
summer
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 at the Brisk cafe. Looking at an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the preference for beverages changed
according to
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 the season but
sales
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 of salad remained constant in both seasons. During
winter
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, the most daily
sales
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 were achieved by selling hot
coffee
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 which accounted for more than 75
servings
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 per day
whereas
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 less than 05
servings
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 of iced
coffee
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 were sold, making it the least sold item in the
winter
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. With daily
sales
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 of 40
servings
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, iced
coffee
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 slowly became the most popular in
summer
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however
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, the customers were still inclined to buy hot
coffee
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 and it is evident by the narrow disparity of 10
servings
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 between the two beverages in the two seasons. Meanwhile, a significant number of
servings
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 of ice cream was sold in both seasons but in comparison to
winter
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 about 15
servings
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 were sold more than in
summer
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. Soup was served 50 times in
winter
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 but it gradually decreased to 25
servings
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 in
summer
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.
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