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an average of sales of selected food items (hot coffee, iced coffee, ice cream, soup, salad) during winter and summer at the Brisk cafe.

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This
 graph illustrates an average of
sales
 of selected food items (hot
coffee
, iced
coffee
, ice cream, soup, salad) during
winter
 and
summer
 at the Brisk cafe. Looking at an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the preference for beverages changed
according to
 the season but
sales
 of salad remained constant in both seasons. During
winter
, the most daily
sales
 were achieved by selling hot
coffee
 which accounted for more than 75
servings
 per day
whereas
 less than 05
servings
 of iced
coffee
 were sold, making it the least sold item in the
winter
. With daily
sales
 of 40
servings
, iced
coffee
 slowly became the most popular in
summer
however
, the customers were still inclined to buy hot
coffee
 and it is evident by the narrow disparity of 10
servings
 between the two beverages in the two seasons. Meanwhile, a significant number of
servings
 of ice cream was sold in both seasons but in comparison to
winter
 about 15
servings
 were sold more than in
summer
. Soup was served 50 times in
winter
 but it gradually decreased to 25
servings
 in
summer
.
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