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Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries’ How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today

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There is a large number of
people
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 who claim that (العنوان).
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, many others take a different point of view. I am going to consider both sides of the argument and
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 give my opinion in the conclusion.‬ ‪ There are several main reasons why so many
people
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 are
against
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 (العنوان). First of all, governments and
notions
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nations
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 around the world are increasingly concerned about (العنوان).
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,
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 a recent report published by the Ministry of Planning in the UNITED
KINGDOM
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 the issue of(العنوان) has reached a critical point.
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, many
people
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 say that ( - ).
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 ( - ).‬ ‪
On the other hand
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, not everyone agrees with the above.
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 with, a government's main priority is to provide (العنوان) for its
people
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.
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, we are frequently told ( + ).
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, we often hear that ( + ).
Overall
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, the statistics and reports show that we need more communities involved
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this
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 same issue. ‬ ‪
It is clear that
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this
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 is not an easy question to answer.
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, I agree more with ideas that ( + or - ).
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, I have some sympathy with
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 idea.
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, I do not forget that everything has pros and cons. We must look at the positive side of it
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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