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The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.

The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.
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This
 chart illustrates
the
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information regarding the
production
 of
paper
,wood pulp and
sawn-wood
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sawn wood
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 in the United Kingdom from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 wood pulp and
sawn-wood
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sawn wood
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 had less
production
 rather than
the
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paper
 and packaging.
While
Paper
Production
 reached a high
peack
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peak
in
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 the end of the year. It is evident from the line graph that
paper
production
 begin in 1980
around
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 240
million
tonnes
.
However
,it raised
until
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to
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 250
million
tonnes
 in 1990.
Therefore
,in the 2000 years
production
 of
paper
 touch
the
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350
million
tonnes
 which
is
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highest
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 amount of rank.
On the other
hand
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 wood pulp
production
 started
200
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at 200
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million
tonnes
 in 1980.
Consequently
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 in the year
of
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1990 to
2000
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,2000
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 there was a big
decreased
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decrease
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 of 150 to 120
million
tonnes
.
Moreover
,since1980 the
production
 of
sawn-wood
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sawn wood
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 was 170
million
tonnes
.
Initially
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 it decreased the
production
 in 1990
around
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to around
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 150
million
tonnes
.
At the end
 of the year
in
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2000
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,2000
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 the
production
 of
sawn-wood
 was fall down until 120
million
tonnes
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, paper, sawn-wood, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • production
  • paper
  • wood pulp
  • sawn-wood
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • significant
  • turning point
  • correlation
  • inverse relationship
  • environmental policy
  • demand
  • technological advancements
  • implications
  • projections
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