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The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.

The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.
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information regarding the
production
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 of
paper
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,wood pulp and
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sawn-wood
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sawn wood
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 in the United Kingdom from 1980 to 2000.
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,
it is clear that
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 wood pulp and
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sawn-wood
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sawn wood
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 had less
production
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 rather than
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paper
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 and packaging.
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Paper
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Production
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 reached a high
peack
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peak
in
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 the end of the year. It is evident from the line graph that
paper
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production
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 begin in 1980
around
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 240
million
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tonnes
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.
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,it raised
until
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 250
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990.
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,in the 2000 years
production
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 of
paper
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 touch
the
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350
million
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tonnes
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 which
is
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highest
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 amount of rank.
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hand
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 wood pulp
production
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 started
200
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million
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tonnes
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 in 1980.
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Consequently
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 in the year
of
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1990 to
2000
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 there was a big
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 of 150 to 120
million
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tonnes
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.
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,since1980 the
production
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 of
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sawn-wood
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sawn wood
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 was 170
million
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tonnes
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.
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Initially
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 it decreased the
production
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 in 1990
around
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to around
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 150
million
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tonnes
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.
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2000
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 the
production
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 of
sawn-wood
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 was fall down until 120
million
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tonnes
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, paper, sawn-wood, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • production
  • paper
  • wood pulp
  • sawn-wood
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • significant
  • turning point
  • correlation
  • inverse relationship
  • environmental policy
  • demand
  • technological advancements
  • implications
  • projections
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