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Traffic congestion is becoming increasingly problematic in major cities. What solutions can you suggest to help solve theproblem?

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in
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megapolises
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 as Shang Hai and Almaty have
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number
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 of residents living there compared to the countryside areas which causes heavy problems with
traffic
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.
This
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 issue can be prevented by
propriate
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appropriate
 steps of
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government
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 of developed cities. First of all, the
government
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 should provide financial support
to
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 public
transports
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.
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, developed, new and convenient buses will encourage citizens to travel by public transport which decreases
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number
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 of cars on the road and reduces
traffic
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 congestion.
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 possible solution is that
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government
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the government
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 must pay attention to
transport
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the transport
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 infrastructure of urban areas. If roads will be designed in
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 right way at the beginning , there would be no need to reconstruct
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 and close
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indefinite
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 period of time in order to repair them which
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 causes
roadblock
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.
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number
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 of individuals that work in
same
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 building or company may
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 play role in
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traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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jams
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. So, to minimize
this
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 problem I recommend companies
to
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own their own buses that will pick up their workers. These transports should have specific and convenient
route
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routes
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depends
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 on where their office worker
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accommodation
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. As the result,
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number
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 of cars will decrease and
as well as
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traffic
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 jams.
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, it prevents
worker
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workers
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being
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from being
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 late for their work.
To sum up
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, the
government
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 should take the required actions to reduce
the
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road congestion as it is becoming worse in most cities all over the world. By developing and improving public transport services, many large countries can overcome
this
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 issue.

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