The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates how many males and females are part of the
employment
force in three different
countries
, Canada, South Korea and Sweden, in 2005 and 2015.
Overall
, the majority of the
employment
corresponded to
man
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men
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in all the
countries
in both years,
although
Canada and Sweeden are the
countries
that contracted more
women
for work. The most noticeable trend is that the
porcentage
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percentage
of
employment
is superior for men than for
women
in all the
countries
, with
a
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60% and almost 80% in 2005 and 2015.
However
,
this
situation is worst in South Korea, where the
amount
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number
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of
women
working it is not more than 30% in 2005, and rose
sligly
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slightly
a 5% in 2015. The chart reveals that Canada is the only country where the
situations
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of
women
really changed,
whereas
in 2005 the percentage of
women
´s
employment
stood at 35%, in the next ten years there was a significant growth of 20% more
of
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employment
for
women
.
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