The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The provided pie charts illustrate the proportions of the
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areas
of the world.
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usage
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two areas's
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higest
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highest
usage
is for industrial reasons.Besides
,the majority of water
spent
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agriculture
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Asia
.
In terms of agricultural purposes, central
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Asia
has the highest proportion of 88%,while
the lowest from
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, Africa and the south east
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south-east
Asia
account for 84% and 81% respectively for the same category. On the other hand
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and central
south east
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southeast
Asia
, witness similar pattern
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patterns
water
consumption for harvesting. Interestingly, 7% of central and south east
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southeast
Asia
's water
allocates for domestic usage
which is the same percentage that Africans use for industrial use.
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Europe reaches 53% in the same context. These two Correct article usage
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of water
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, the highest domestic usage
of 19% of water
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which is 10%.Submitted by dmdeemanthakasun on
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