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since the 18th century technonological advances have replaced people in the workplace. with today's technology this process is happening at agreater rate. technology is increasingly reaposible for unemployment. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Progresses in
technology
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 in recent years have had a great impact on modern human lives as they have caused continuous decreases in
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 opportunities.
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effects
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, disadvantages and
advantages
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 of these technological advances and will be argued in favour of their
advantages
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. -The progressive
technology
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 rates have significant
effects
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 on our world.
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, the main effect is that they changed our world's shape because they assisted mankind in building new cities, and
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 by using these technologies,
people
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 could invade space.
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, they are responsible for the distribution of education and sciences all over the world by using the international web.
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, any individual can learn remotely using computers. All in all,
technology
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 facilitates
people
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's daily lives greatly. -
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 to the positive
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 of
technology
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, it has two main
advantages
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. The first one is that by using machines, manufactured by recent
technology
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, human beings could use desert lands transforming them into cultivated lands which in turn creates massive
job
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 opportunities for
people
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 seeking new occupations. The second benefit of it is that
technology
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 enabled them to explore space, and may in the future discover new habitable worlds. Shortly,
technology
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 helps societies improve their lives by adding more viable habitats. Despite the several beneficial achievements of
technology
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, it has two main drawbacks. As
technology
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 continues to advance, dependence on human labour forces is dramatically reduced.
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 happens because most technologies need fewer
people
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 to run and use
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robots and artificial intelligence in our societies. And
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result
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 an enormous number of individuals lose their jobs every year. Another disadvantage of it is that
technology
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 can be used in manufacturing weapons that are used to destroy communities and their properties and economy which will lead to decreased labour forces needed
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 the shrinkage of the economy and loss of facilities. All in all,
technology
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 can be a curse if used in immoral ways like wars and full dependence on machinery
instead
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 of humans. In conclusion,
technology
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 has many
effects
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 on human beings like reforming our planet's surface shape and invading space. The main
advantages
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 of it are the creation of newly cultivated lands and exploring the universe. The principal disadvantage
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 it is the continuous declining demand for labour forces that are replaced by machines and I think the benefits and
effects
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 of
technology
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 outweigh the drawbacks
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 decreased
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 demand can be controlled by organizing population increase and finding new
job
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 fields.
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