Water is a natural resources that should be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that it is more advantageous if government forbid the sale of bottled
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. I completely disagree with
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opinion and think that
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trend has many drawbacks. First of all, I believe that
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is one of the vital elements which is really necessary to human beings.
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, without a drink, none of the living creatures can survive. Unfortunately,
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crucial element is limited in the world and because of global warming the natural glaciers are melting;
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, it’s a great menace to natural
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. The government should consider the future
people
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and save
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vital liquid.
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, by selling the rain produced in the factory, the public understands its value and never wastes it carelessly.
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, companies produce bottled drinks with great precision
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reduce harmful materials from
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and add minerals that are required for the human body.
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, when
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drink mineral
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, they know they
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filtered
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that doesn't have any detrimental effect on their bodies;
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, many diseases
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are eliminated
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from the earth and public hygiene may grow. What's more, by prohibiting bottled
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trade many
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make
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redundant and lose their job;
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, unemployment increase in society and the crowd should look for other jobs that may turn into illegal jobs.
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, I strongly believe that selling
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in bottles is more beneficial than distributing
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freely because it is a significant element for living and
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should use it thriftily ,
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, bottled
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doesn't have a damaging effect on
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's bodies.

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