Water is a natural resources that should be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that it is more advantageous if government forbid the sale of bottled
water
. I completely disagree with
this
opinion and think that
this
trend has many drawbacks. First of all, I believe that
water
is one of the vital elements which is really necessary to human beings.
In other words
, without a drink, none of the living creatures can survive. Unfortunately,
this
crucial element is limited in the world and because of global warming the natural glaciers are melting;
hence
, it’s a great menace to natural
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. The government should consider the future
people
and save
this
vital liquid.
For example
, by selling the rain produced in the factory, the public understands its value and never wastes it carelessly.
Secondly
, companies produce bottled drinks with great precision
and
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reduce harmful materials from
water
and add minerals that are required for the human body.
For instance
, when
people
drink mineral
water
, they know they
drink
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are drinking
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filtered
water
that doesn't have any detrimental effect on their bodies;
therefore
, many diseases
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from the earth and public hygiene may grow. What's more, by prohibiting bottled
water
trade many
people
make
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redundant and lose their job;
therefore
, unemployment increase in society and the crowd should look for other jobs that may turn into illegal jobs.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that selling
water
in bottles is more beneficial than distributing
water
freely because it is a significant element for living and
people
should use it thriftily ,
moreover
, bottled
water
doesn't have a damaging effect on
people
's bodies.
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