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Human activities have had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that it cannot be changed, while other believes action can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Human activities can be split into two main categories, one is what is beneficial with positive
impact
 and the other which has a negative
impact
, especially on
plants
 and animals. One point of view may consider that humans can't change and that bad
impact
 will continue, and they may have good evidence of that from what we are seeing every single day.
However
, others may want to address the issue and focus more on the solution to it. from my point of view, I would say we can do a lot to reduce our
impact
 on the animals and
plants
 around the world, and that can start by reducing the amount of waste that we are dumping daily, for ,example plastic waste as it has the highest
impact
 on
plants
 ,
also
 we can turn the table by just simply replacing our common wastes
such
 as cups and
plants
 with paper.
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