The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. 150 words

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.

150 words
The bar chart reveals the percentages of British people who purchased three types of music albums
according to
sex and
age
.
Overall
, it is obviously clear that there were 3 types of music albums which are called Pop,
Rock
and Classical
whereas
the majority of people have bought
Rock
albums and a minor majority of citizens have purchased Classical music tapes
for
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except the
age
group of +45.
To begin
with,
Rock
song tapes have been purchased by a significant number of individuals
except
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older aged people and more than 30% of teenagers who were in the 25-34
age
group included it. Less than 20% of females and less than 10% of older ones had flavour on
Rock
.
Moreover
, the percentages of buying Pop tapes were similar to the
Rock
percentages.
Furthermore
, 20% of society who were +45
age
had passionate about Classical,
in contrast
to the ages 16-24 and 35-44.
However
, more than 15% of teenage individuals were captivated by Classic songs
while
nearly 10% of males bought that kind of song CDs.
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