Some people feel that government should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and school. Other feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The phenomenon of a high tax rate
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charged by the government in order to enjoy
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public services has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
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issue in question may be. I totally agree that using
money
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to exchange services and facilities is the best idea. Of all the reasons why
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is the best
apporach
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, probably the most significant one is that those services or public facilities require
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massive
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to maintain their operation and
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. Most countries
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on the tax claimed from their citizens. Without
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process, their government cannot even function.
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,
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money
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always use to help the country in
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continue
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development
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the pace of
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development will not
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than
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countries
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as transportation, public
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centre, medical facilities, etc.., which would
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the most of the people. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that it would help people to
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thier
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their
elderly life.
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, many elders are living alone and do not have any family or
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; As
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time going as they get older, their work
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performance
will decline
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gradually
unit they completely lost the ability in earning
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to afford
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basic spending. To prevent that,
government
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have some policies to help their citizens to save
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and ensure
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can acquire their needs when they are older. Under
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line of thinking, it seems to me that
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tax rate would make
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money
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with
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the most effective and proper way
to
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us and
country
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.
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, I completely agree with
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idea that larger salaries should be submitted to the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of salaries
  • necessary public services
  • infrastructure
  • redistribute wealth
  • wealth gap
  • equitable
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • tax evasion
  • tax avoidance
  • tax revenue
  • burdensome
  • human capital
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