The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the best ten countries for the manufacture and
usage
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of
electricity
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in 2014.
Overall
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, China was the leader in
electricity
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production
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and
consumption
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and the United States follows china in second place. There is a huge gap between the second and third
country
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Russia was the third one in the
usage
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and
consumption
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the
electricity
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. The Korean Republic were the least one in
production
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and
consumption
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. First of all, China had a huge lead in
electricity
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production
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with nearly 5.4
billion
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kWh
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and uses 5.322
billion
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kWh
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of
electricity
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. The closest one to follow them is the United States with over 4
billion
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kWh
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production
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and nearly 3.9
billion
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consumption
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.
Secondly
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, India and Canada produce way more than
usage
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they manufacture over 100
billion
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kWh
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.
On the other hand
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, Germany uses 582
billion
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kWh
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of
electricity
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and they only produce 526
billion
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kWh
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of
electricity
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there was a gap between
usage
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and
production
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, electricity, production, consumption, billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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