The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the best ten countries for the manufacture and
usage
of
electricity
in 2014.
Overall
, China was the leader in
electricity
production
and
consumption
and the United States follows china in second place. There is a huge gap between the second and third
country
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Russia was the third one in the
usage
and
consumption
the
electricity
. The Korean Republic were the least one in
production
and
consumption
. First of all, China had a huge lead in
electricity
production
with nearly 5.4
billion
kWh
and uses 5.322
billion
kWh
of
electricity
. The closest one to follow them is the United States with over 4
billion
kWh
production
and nearly 3.9
billion
consumption
.
Secondly
, India and Canada produce way more than
usage
they manufacture over 100
billion
kWh
.
On the other hand
, Germany uses 582
billion
kWh
of
electricity
and they only produce 526
billion
kWh
of
electricity
there was a gap between
usage
and
production
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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