The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These figures demonstrate the number of graduates and postgraduates who did not take a full-time job after graduating from the United Kingdom in 2008. In general, these column charts illustrated the peak of alum who chose a
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-study option and the bottom of the ones opting for voluntary work. We witnessed a 10-time difference in the number of undergraduate and postgraduate ones. In the first diagram, the figure of graduated alumni, most graduates pursued higher education
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nearly 30,000, which is opposed to 3 500 who decided to participate in voluntary work. The remaining two columns for part-time work and unemployment were relatively close, totalling 17 735 compared to 16 235. The same pattern happened in the other chart for postgraduates. Pursuing higher education was still the most favourable option, with 2 725, compared to the less popular option for voluntary at the bottom of only 345. In the second chart, the number of students who chose a part-time job column, which was nearly equal to
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academic research options, was higher than the unemployment, with 2535 compared to 1625.
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