IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

The graphs below show the growth in wages within the G7 nations between 2000-2007 and 2008-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the growth in wages within the G7 nations between 2000-2007 and 2008-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#graphs #show #growth #wages #g #nations #summarise #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given bar charts demonstrate the progress of
wages
Use synonyms
 in G7 countries for 12 years from 2000 to 2012. In general, all G7 countries witnessed a downward trend in the
growth
Use synonyms
 of
wages
Use synonyms
 throughout the period.
In addition
Linking Words
, the
UK
Use synonyms
 dominated the proportion of
Use synonyms
wages’s
Change noun form
wages
show examples
growth
Use synonyms
 in the first year, but in 2012,
Canada
Use synonyms
 took over
this
Linking Words
 position. Turning to the details, in 2000, the
growth
Use synonyms
 of
wages
Use synonyms
 in the
UK
Use synonyms
 and the US was over 3%, where the former was 5%, and the latter was approximately 3,5%.
This
Linking Words
 country was followed by
Canada
Use synonyms
, Germany, and France
having
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
where
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
growth
Use synonyms
 which was from around 1% to 3%.
However
Linking Words
, the figure
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
for Italy and Japan was less
thant
Correct your spelling
than
 1%. Between 2001 and 2007, the figure of the
UK
Use synonyms
, the US, and
Canada
Use synonyms
 were positioned
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the third best place despite having a fluctuation trend where in 2007, they accounted for more
2
Change preposition
than 2
show examples
%.
Following
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
, France and Germany saw a declining trend to roughly 0,5% in the same year.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the figure
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
for Italy and Japan had a minus point of
this
Linking Words
growth
Use synonyms
. In 2012,
Canada
Use synonyms
, Germany, and France had positive points in the progress of
wages
Use synonyms
 accounting for 0,5% to 2,5%. Meanwhile, Italy, Japan, the
UK
Use synonyms
, and the US had minus points in
this
Linking Words
 parameter where minus 2,1,5, and 0,5 consecutively
Submitted by kamranasatirsyady on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words wages, growth, uk, canada with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: