The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The four charts compare the distribution of employment in 3 different sectors in
town
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A and B in 1960 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
town
A saw an increase in the proportion of people working in manufacturing, which overtook the other sectors to employ most of the workers in the
town
. In
town
B;
however
, sales
has
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the highest percentage of the workforce. Looking at
town
A, we can see that in 1960, 41% of people had a sale-related job, which is much higher than the figure for manufacturing and services, at 30% and 29% respectively. Over the period shown, the proportion of people working in manufacturing witnessed a
drammatic
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dramatic
rise and ranked top at 64%
while
the figure for sales
droped
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dropped
a half to 20%, and the rest was for services at 16% only. Turning to
town
B, sales, despite a drop from 70% in 1960 to 53% in 2010, maintained to attract the majority of workers. Manufacturing and services,
in contrast
, saw a rise in the percentage of employees of 15% and 2%,respectively.
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