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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts compare and contrast ,how UK
graduates
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 and postgraduate students ended up after completing their
studies
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 in 2008 in four different categories namely,part-time
work
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,voluntary
work
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,
further
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studies
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 and unemployed,except for people who entered full-time
work
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at the end
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 of their education. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,it is readily apparent that the number of
graduates
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 surpassed the number of postgraduates, engaging in the given four categories.In both groups majority of individuals were involved in
further
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studies
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while
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 voluntary
work
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 was the least popular among all. 29665 UK alumna enrolled on
further
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studies
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, becoming the largest group among the given groups,
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 only 3550 did the voluntary jobs, being the least interesting activity.Contrastly, less than nearly 10 fold of postgraduate students took the pathway to
further
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studies
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 and voluntary
work
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(2725 and 345 respectively). Part-time
work
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 was enjoyed by 17735
graduates
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 and 2535 postgraduates meanwhile,16235
graduates
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 and 1625 postgraduate students remained unemployed in the given year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, studies, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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