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The world population has grown at a rapid rate over the past 50 years, and it is predicted to grow further in the future. What could the future effects of this growth be? Should anything be done to limit world population growth?

#world #population #rate #years #future #effects #growth #limit
World
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The world
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popultion
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population
 is a big deal
in
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apply
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these days. It's growing so fast and
pepole
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people
 would be
woreid
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worried
 about it more than 50 years ago. I think there
is
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are
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to
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two
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side
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sides
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for
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to
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 each
effects
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effect
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 but for
me
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,me
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i
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I
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belive
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believe
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it
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apply
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the
world
popultion
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population
 had
benfits
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benefits
 for our
world
.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 all person around the
world
having
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have
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 a
commnction
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communication
 and he
wants
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towants
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 get more relative and more
knolge
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knowledge
 about others. So it's a
desastier
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disaster
 for some people
hoam
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home
 thinking about
plant
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plants
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 and the
eniverment
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enlivenment
. But what they should think about
how
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is how
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 we
effect
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affect
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 in good ways for next
genration
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generation
 to see the
beuty
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beauty
 of life and living
in
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apply
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. They all
wareid
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varied
warned
 maby the
world
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world's
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popultion
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population
 will become like china or
indeia
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India
indeed
idea
 but no we must
seeing
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see
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 the
postive
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positive
 side
to
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of
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haveing
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having
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 a big family and
big
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a big
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socitey
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society
. The medical
proplem
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problem
 those what we start
minde
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mind
 to
,
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apply
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 if they will have a good take care or not. What about the
studie
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studies
study
 we should focus
in
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on
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.
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?
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 And
then
 the chance to get
job
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a job
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gining
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inning
gaining
giving
thier
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their
 own money. For
ecnomie
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economy
economic
 next
genration
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generation
the
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apply
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will have more
craetive
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creative
 ideas to invest
and
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in and
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growing
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grow
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.
How ever
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However
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 it's
life
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a life
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 circle
thats
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that
that's
all
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a
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person
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people
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 have to
bulid
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build
his
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their
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 own family and start taking care of them.
Then
 they will grow and so on
..
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.
...
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 It's
haret
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heart
hard
 breath you have your own family
not
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,not
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a
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an
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isue
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issue
. If they
wants
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want
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 to
limited
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limit
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 the
world
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world's
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poplution
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population
pollution
 they will think
how
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about how
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world
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the world
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 would be.
World
poplution
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population
pollution
 is a gift we had to be proud regarding. We should thank
allah
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Allah
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 for it.
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