People hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer. You should use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
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Some individuals chose to spend their leisure
time
with regards
to the public trend rather than spending it in a productive manner. I strongly believe that, Fix the agreement mistake
regard
people
's interest in spending their free time
doing more valuable activities such
as performing exercise and family time
.
Nowadays, people
are becoming busier in meeting the demands of their daily lives. However
, many individuals are still conscious when it comes to their overall
wellness. People
use their free time
at work in doing relaxation technique
Fix the agreement mistake
techniques
such
as breathing and strecthing
exercises. Correct your spelling
stretching
Moreover
, spending their free time
wisely help
the employees Change the verb form
helps
re-charge
their body and concentrate Correct your spelling
recharge
in
the job. Change preposition
on
For instance
, in my workplace
we are given a Add a comma
,workplace
30 minute
Add a hyphen
30-minute
breaktime
and Correct your spelling
break time
i
spend it eating Change the capitalization
I
my
healthy snacks and socializing with my colleagues. Correct pronoun usage
apply
This
kind of relaxation inspired me to be more efficient and productive at work.
Another reason is people
chose to allocate the rest days with their families to have a simple family gathering. Apart from that, some individuals proritise
family Correct your spelling
prioritise
time
because it's a way of showing love to them. They prefer to have dinner and some games that would encourage participation among family members. In addition
, others like parents love to bring their children in
the park and playground where they could maximize the space for them to be able to do physical activities. Change preposition
to
For instance
, every weekends
my husband and Change to a singular noun
weekend
i
always see to it that we bring our children to their favourite restaurant and Change the capitalization
I
then
go to park
to do some playing to burn all the calories that we had.
In conclusion, spending leisure Add an article
the park
a park
time
depends on the people
's impact nor others
preference on how to use it. I strongly believe, Change noun form
others'
other's
people
should value free
Add an article
the free
time
that they have because it would help maintain a healthy body both physically and emotionally.Submitted by namlaemy on
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