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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served they liked the hotel but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter 1)Say what the participants liked about the hotel 2)Explain why they were unhappy about the food 3)Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future Write at least 150 words You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#company #place #hotel #feedback #participants #food #lunch #manager #future #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir, I would express my concern with
regards
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, to the recent visit to your hotel for
all-day
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an all-day
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 meeting. It was
really
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 great experience and ambience we had so far from the most visited hotels. But the
participants
 were
quit
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 disappointed with the food service. Most of the
participants
 were happy and satisfied with
an
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 arrangement made for the meeting, to be specific most of them loved the welcoming gesture to the
participants
. The seating chairs
was
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 good enough with proper cushion and
meeting
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the meeting
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 room was properly equipped with
necessary
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 equipment which we hardly find
it
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to
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in
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proper
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 condition
compare
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 to other hotels.
Nevertheless
, it is extremely disappointing about the food arrangement done for the lunch. In most of the
scenarios
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 they were using
same
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 spoons to serve both veg and non-veg items. Which made
uncomfortable
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it uncomfortable
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to
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for
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 vegan
participants
and
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also
, there was too much salt
for
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 the white pasta served.
In addition
 to
this
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 the dessert was tasteless. As
valuable
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 customer, I would like to suggest you
to
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change the chief who was in charge and appoint a good Italian chief rather than using some local person
for
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to make the food. Hope you find
this
 feedback valuable and help in improvising your service. Thanking you Yours faithfully, Mathew Abhishek
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