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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served they liked the hotel but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter 1)Say what the participants liked about the hotel 2)Explain why they were unhappy about the food 3)Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future Write at least 150 words You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir, I would like to express my concern with regard, to the recent visit to your hotel for an all-day meeting. It was a really great experience and ambience we had so far from the most visited hotels. But the
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 were quite disappointed with the food service. Most of the
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 were happy and satisfied with the arrangements made for the meeting, to be specific most of them loved the welcoming gesture to the
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. The seating chairs were good enough with proper cushion and the meeting room was properly equipped with necessary equipment which we hardly find to be in proper condition compare to the other hotels.
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, it is extremely disappointing about the food arrangement done for the lunch. In most of the
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 scenarios they were using the same spoons to serve both veg and non-veg items. Which made it uncomfortable for vegan
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, there was too much salt in the white pasta served.
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 the dessert was tasteless. As a valued customer, I would like to suggest you change the chief who was in charge and appoint a good Italian chief rather than using some local person to make the food. Hope you find
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 feedback valuable and help in improvising your service. Thanking you Yours faithfully, Mathew Abhishek
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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