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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the information about how many male and female workers are there in a university in 2012 in different faculties.
Overall
, As seen from
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 number the male highest percentage occupied in
engineering
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 sector
whereas
,
education
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 facilities females carried
tops
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 position. In beginning, arts carried almost similar percentages 58 % and 42 % respectively.
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, almost half of the males are engaged in business 62 %. One of the interesting points is
females
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 portion(72%) is almost three times more than
males
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 (25).
On the other hand
, one
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 percentage of total staff are boys in engineering fields which is the highest among all portions.
Furthermore
, both staff have
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nearly the same ratio in the medical field.
Additionally
, both in law and science males have almost similar percentage average
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 which is higher than females which carries almost 40 on average.
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