The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members  across the faculties of a major university in 2012

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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bar chart illustrates the proportions of the employees in seven different sectors in a major university depending on their gender in 2012. Looking from an
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perspective it is readily apparent the majority of males are involved in engineering
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most females are incorporated in education
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.
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, the engineering
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has the least percentage of women as staff members, the business department holds the lowest proportion of men.In the medicine department, they share nearly equal proportions . 85% of the total staff in the engineering
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are males
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science ,business and law departments occupy them in significant proportions accounting for 62%,62%, and 60% respectively.Their contribution to education and arts is marginally low.( 25%;42% respectively.)
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, female counterparts collaborate with 72% of education
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.Apart from arts medicine and law where they achieve 58%;50% and 40% respectively ,other departments lack females as staff members accounting below 40%.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words faculty with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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