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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information , such as their hobbies and interests , and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful . Others disagree Discuss both views and give your own opnion

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It goes without saying that since the 20th century, when modern jobs have
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 introduced
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 as office ,company or industry works,
people
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 must go through an interview in order to get the
job
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 and
this
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 is by far the hardest part to get a
job
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.
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people
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 are asked different types of
questions
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 which can include personal or
work related
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questions
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. Some
people
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 are of the opinion that asking personal
questions
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 is useless and some
people
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 think it is really useful. As far as I am concerned, asking personal
questions
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 can be useful but it should not affect the outcome of the interview. On the one hand, some
people
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 believe it is necessary to ask personal
questions
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 in interviews. Perhaps the most significant reason causing
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 kind of opinion is the
fact
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 that interviewers want to figure out what kind of person is the
candidate
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.
Therefore
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,
this
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 can help them to realize whether the
candidate
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 is a good choice for a particular
job
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 or not and
also
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 there might be some specific circumstances
that
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in that
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 the
candidate
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's personality
is
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that is
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 really important.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 believe that personal
questions
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 should not be asked. The reason behind
this
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 opinion might be the
fact
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 that the majority of candidates are not honest with their interviewer regarding personal
questions
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such
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 as hobbies or interests. In
fact
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, most
people
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 try to say something just to pass the interview and to show themselves as
a
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good
candidate
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 for a particular
job
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.
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,
this
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 group of
people
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 believe that
hobbies
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the hobbies
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 or interests of a
candidate
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 have no effect on their
job
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. To sum it all up, having considered all the aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that asking these types of
questions
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 might be useful but you can not judge a person by their hobbies or other factors. In
fact
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, the skills and
behavior
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behaviour
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 of the
candidate
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 must be considered
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 their hard and soft skills. Because these are the only factors
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is
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 beneficial for every company.
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, it was just a story in a nutshell and there are more cogent reasons to be contemplated. I hope every
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 or interviewer can find a person who is a good choice for a particular
job
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.
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