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The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998.

The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998.
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The table shows the proportion of
production
 of cacao
beans
 in six different regions between 1992 and 1998.
Overall
, it can be seen that
production
 of
cocoa
beans
 increased in Asia , South
America
 and Oceania in a given period of time
whereas
 Africa and England decreased slightly . Meanwhile,
number
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the number
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 of cacao
beans
 produced in North Central
America
 was
same
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the same
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 as starting
of
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 the year. Asia and South
America
 became
biggest
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the biggest
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 producers of
cocoa
beans
 from 1992 to 1998.In 1992 Asia started
production
 with 11900 tons
cocoa
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of cocoa
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beans
 and the figures
of
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for
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production
 saw a dramatic rise to almost 43600 tons in 1998.
In addition
, a significant majority of the
production
 in South
America
observed
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 over 6 years. By the year 1998, South
America
’s
production
 had risen to 38900.Both Countries experienced
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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production
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the production
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 of
cocoa
beans
.
Initially
 , England produced 56000 tons
cocoa
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of cocoa
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beans
 in 1992
then
 it continued to produce
to
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67000 and suddenly fell by 43000
production
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productions
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.In 1998 England dropped
at
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to
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 49000
of
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cocoa
beans
.
Similarly
, Africa slightly fell from 1992
t0
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to
 1998.
On the other hand
,
in
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North and Central
America
 saw a decline in
production
 between 1994 but over 6 years it remain unchanged.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, beans, cocoa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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