The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
The pie charts show the percentage of
volunteer
people
in various kinds of
organizations
in 2008 and 2014.
Overall
, the percentage of
volunteer
people
in environmental,
sport
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, and
health care
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healthcare
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organizations
increased
whereas
the proportion of
volunteer
people
in other types of
organizations
decreased.
In addition
, the
overall
percentages of all
organizations
varied over a given period of time. In 2008, participation of
volunteer
people
in
environmental
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organization
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organizations
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, arts and education was 21%, 18% and 24% respectively. Most of the
volunteers
took part in educational
organization
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organizations
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with 24%.
On
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the same time, sports and others had
same
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percentage of participation of
volunteers
which was 15%,
while
only 7%
volunteers
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took part in health care. In 2014, significantly more
volunteers
worked in environmental and
sport
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organizations
compared with the other fields, at 29% and 25% respectively. Meanwhile, the figures for art and other
volunteers
both fell by 6%. There was
also
a slight fall in
volunteers
in educational
organizations
, at 17%,
while
volunteering in health care was still the least preferred option, at only 8%.
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