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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph illustrates the weekly
consumption
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 of four different types of meat (
fish
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,
lamb
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,
beef
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, and
chicken
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) in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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,
lamb
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,
fish
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, and
beef
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consumption
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 reduced throughout the time period
while
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chicken
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consumption
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 rose.
Additionally
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, the least
favorite
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 type of meat among the four was
fish
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.
To begin
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 with, the weekly intake of
fish
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 started at just over 50
grams
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 and fluctuated over the period before reaching its lowest point of roughly 48
grams
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 in 1999. It
then
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 slowly increased to around 49
grams
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.
Secondly
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,
beef
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consumption
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 started at around 220
grams
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 per person in 1979 and was the most popular type of meat that year.
However
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,
beef
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 intake fluctuated in the following years and reached a peak of around 245
grams
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 per week before declining to its lowest point of roughly 100
grams
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 between 1999 and 2004.
On the other hand
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,
lamb
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 and
chicken
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consumption
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 began at around 150
grams
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 at the beginning of the period.
Lamb
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 experienced a gradual decrease over the next two and a half decades
while
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 experiencing several fluctuations, ultimately reaching around 60
grams
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.
Finally
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,
chicken
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consumption
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 experienced an upward trend and reached its highest point of 250
grams
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 in 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, lamb, beef, chicken, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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