most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

In a day people spend an enormous amount of time on time at
work
. In
this
particular
time
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some elements keep a predominant role
for
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happiness at their
work
. The following essay will discuss in detail
about
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some factors and how realistic they are.
To begin
with,
high
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range of salary
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, as well as commanding positions,
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as well as
commanding positions are major factors for
job
satisfaction
. A
well paid
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salary can endure all the living expenses smoothly and the
well
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position post secures their
job
. Another aspect,
if
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any person would get better
circumstance
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and good management, they will
work
with their full potential and enthusiasm
otherwise
they could not survive and leave the
job
.
In addition
to
this
, the majority of employees confirmed that the expression of the manager is one of the reasons for choosing their
job
.
For instance
, giving regular workloads.
As a
result
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the employees reduce their
job
performance.
However
, in the 21st century getting all the benefits from their
work
is quite impossible, because a huge competition among
job
candidates is running all over the world. Though they can't manage all the factors that provide
satisfaction
, they have to continue their
job
for attaining their living expenses.
Moreover
, in spite of getting a highly paid
salary
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they can't dispel the mental stress. They are provided
lots
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of
work
as well as
lots of responsibility. In conclusion, in
job
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the job
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sector the
satisfaction
is an
is
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essential
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thing. There are
lot
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of elements that
caters
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the
job
satisfaction
as well as
realities
have
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that have
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to be faced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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