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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts depict the amount of
water
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 consumed which is surveyed in six countries in the world.
Overall
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, the
water
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 consumed for agriculture,
whereas
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 only in North
America
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 and
Europe
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 revealed that industrial use
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 the highest amount. In detail, the highest percentage of
water
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 used for agriculture is in Central Asia, which depicts 88%. The number of agricultural use in Africa is 84%, which is the second largest percentage, followed by South East Asia, South
America
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, North
America
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 and
Europe
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.
Additionally
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, fewer people used
water
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 for domestic, which is shown in the reports that all of the countries are below 20%.
On the other hand
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, only North
America
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 and
Europe
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 which has the biggest amount for industry. In fact, 48% of
water
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 is consumed in North
America
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,
whereas
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 more than half is consumed in
Europe
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.
In contrast
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, society tends to use less
water
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 for farming activities in these areas, which depicts only 39% in North
America
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 and 32% in
Europe
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "depict" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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