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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the
process
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 used to make drinking
water
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 by rain, in a little city in Australia.
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, it can be seen that it is not a complicated
process
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 which is formed only by six stages, the linear
process
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, technically begins when there are
atmosferic
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atmospheric
 precipitations,
through
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though
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 it can continue to loop indefinitely every time it rains.
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, the saving procedure starts on the roof of the house, from which all the drops fall down into the drain, which is under the structure. Later the rain arrives at the
water
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 filter where is cleaned and the next phase is
the
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apply
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storage,
inside
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which is collected the
water
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 before the treatment. At that point, the
water
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 is ready to be filtered one more time with the addition of some chemicals
at
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in
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 the
process
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 that makes the
water
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 drinkable.
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,
on
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in
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 the
last
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phase
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,phase
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 every person in the town can enjoy the
water
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 from the tap of his house.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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