The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The figure illustrates the
process
used to make drinking water
by rain, in a little city in Australia. Overall
, it can be seen that it is not a complicated process
which is formed only by six stages, the linear process
, technically begins when there are atmosferic
precipitations, Correct your spelling
atmospheric
through
it can continue to loop indefinitely every time it rains.
Correct your spelling
though
Firstly
, the saving procedure starts on the roof of the house, from which all the drops fall down into the drain, which is under the structure. Later the rain arrives at the water
filter where is cleaned and the next phase is the
storage, Correct article usage
apply
inside
which is collected the Change preposition
apply
water
before the treatment.
At that point, the water
is ready to be filtered one more time with the addition of some chemicals at
the Change preposition
in
process
that makes the water
drinkable. Finally
, on
the Change preposition
in
last
phase
every person in the town can enjoy the Add a comma
,phase
water
from the tap of his house.Submitted by robertasottile.rbst on
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