The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The figure illustrates the
process
used to make drinking
water
by rain, in a little city in Australia.
Overall
, it can be seen that it is not a complicated
process
which is formed only by six stages, the linear
process
, technically begins when there are
atmosferic
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atmospheric
precipitations,
through
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it can continue to loop indefinitely every time it rains.
Firstly
, the saving procedure starts on the roof of the house, from which all the drops fall down into the drain, which is under the structure. Later the rain arrives at the
water
filter where is cleaned and the next phase is
the
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storage,
inside
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which is collected the
water
before the treatment. At that point, the
water
is ready to be filtered one more time with the addition of some chemicals
at
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the
process
that makes the
water
drinkable.
Finally
,
on
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the
last
phase
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every person in the town can enjoy the
water
from the tap of his house.
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