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The percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity:2010

The bar graph compares the proportion of males and females who perform physical activity on a regular basis in Australia in the year 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that with the exception of age groups of 15-24 and 65 and over,
women
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 in the remaining categories did the most exercises over the one-year period.
To begin
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 with, men between the ages of 15 and 24 recorded the highest percentage for performing exercises daily at 52.8,
while
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,
women
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 in the same group stood at 47.7%, the fourth highest in the year. For younger adults, the number for both sexes was less than half. Moving on, with increasing age, a lot of
women
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 than men did frequent exercises with the highest percentage of 53.3, followed by 53 and 52.5 for people in the ages of 45-54, 55-64, and 35-44 respectively. The values for males in the same set were less than 50%.
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, the number of
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 keeping fit at 65 years and over reduced to reach a relatively similar level of 47% with the opposite gender.

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