The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The diagram illustrates how rainwater is collected and reused for drinking in an Australian household.
Overall
, it is a liner
process consisting of three main stages: collecting, treatment and developing.
Correct your spelling
linear
The first step is
to collect rainwater during raining
by using special drain systems, which consists of pipelines on the roofs and underground drain collector. Replace the word
rain
Following
this
, water
flows through filter
to remove solid impurities Add an article
the filter
such
as leaves, dust and sand. After that
the Add a comma
,that
water
stores
in a special storage tank, to keep some surplus in case there is a drought or other Add a missing verb
is stores
nature
disaster.
In the Replace the word
natural
nest
Correct your spelling
next
step
the fluid is transported to Add a comma
,step
second
stage of processing into a Change the article
the second
water
treatment tank, where is added special chemicals to kill detrimental bacteria and disinfect the water
. Finally
, the flued
ready to be transported in pipes to Correct your spelling
fluid
Add an article
the household
household
again, so that people will be able to use and drink pure Fix the agreement mistake
households
water
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