The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the proportion of four
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group
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of ages in New Zealand in the period between 1950 and 2050. During
this
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time, two
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with the age
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35 to above have increased from 1950 to 2050,
while
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two other
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have experienced a decrease.
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35-74 is the
group
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with the most dramatic increase in the percentage of
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population
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and has the highest data in 1950. In 1950, the percentage of the
population
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in
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0-14, 15-34, 35-64 and 65 plus were estimated at around 10%, 15%, 28% and 32% respectively. Over the following 40 years, the 15-34
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rose strongly to about 45%,
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three other
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only changed slightly. In 2023,
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-14
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and the 35-64
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have the same figure for
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population
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the population
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and
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35-65
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begin overtaking
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the 0
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-14
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. In 2030,
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the 0
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-14
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will continue to be overtaken by the
65 above
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65-above
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group
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at around 16%,
while
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the percentage of
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population
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the population
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of the 15-34
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will be still
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the highest
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. In 2045,
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the 35
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-64
group
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will start to overtake the 15-34
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at 30% and become the
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with the biggest proportion of
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population
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the population
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in New Zealand. In the
last
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year in the graph, the data of the
population
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of 4
groups
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are predicted in order from 0 to 65 above years old at about 10%, 29%, 34% and 20% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words group, groups, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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