The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps here depict the current layout of an industrial
area
in the town of Norbiton
,
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and the future development in
plan
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the plan
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for
this
site
. The current arrangement for the industrial
area
is
realtively
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relatively
simple, with just a few
factories
located in the southern part of the
area
, with a few roads connecting the
factories
. In the northern
area
, there is a river flowing in between the
factories
and an
area
of farmland. The Norbiton town
lays
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in the western part of the
site
. The planned
developmnent
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development
redevelopment
of the
area
will turn most of the
factories
into housing for local residents
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and will add many new
infrasturatures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
such
as shops,
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a school
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school
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,
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a playground
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playground
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and
medical
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center
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for the convenience of the residents. A new bridge will be built across the river to connect the main industrial
area
with the houses added
in
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the northern side of the
site
, where there is entirely farmland.
Additionally
, more roads will
also
be constructed to link the different zones in the industrial
site
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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