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Research shows that a lot of energy is saved if people spend a shorter time in the workplace. To save energy (e.g. gas, electricity etc.), some companies are closing down on one day per week. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Companies
 these days prefer that their
employees
 choose to
work
 from home over on-site
work
 in order to save money by spending less on maintenance of their
work
 site. Doing
this
 has multiple advantages and disadvantages, I believe that allowing
employees
 to
work
 from home and keeping the
work
 site closed for a short period of
time
 will be beneficial to all
companies
.
However
, there are many loopholes in
this
 way of
work
culturre
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culture
, as more and more people
work
 from home harder it is to monitor all the workers.
secondly
,
employees
 can pretend to
work
 as they rest or take their
time
 off. But at the same
time
,
companies
 can save a lot of money by greatly reducing their expenses.
Lastly
, the
efficiewncy
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efficiency
 of the workers is diminished as they are restricted to working from their houses and have less social interaction. Even with all these disadvantages I believe that it is worth taking the risk. Because
this
 culture is growing rapidly
due to
 the recent global pandemic.
This
 implies that new rules will be implemented to maintain the efficiency of the
employees
.
due to
 these new rules and
policies
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 people will avoid cheating. All these reasons eliminate the disadvantages of shutting down a company for a short period. In a nutshell, all
companies
 can close all their functions for a short
time
 and ask their
employees
 to
work
 from their houses and amend rules to maintain discipline. By doing
this
 a company can save a huge sum of money in the long term and
also
 save lots of energy which indeed
saeves
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saves
 our nature.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Operational Costs
  • Utilities
  • Carbon Emissions
  • Environmental Conservation
  • Work-life Balance
  • Job Satisfaction
  • Heightened Productivity
  • Flexible Work Arrangements
  • Remote Work
  • Workflow
  • Customer Service Standards
  • Revenue
  • Profitability
  • Financial Concerns
  • Hourly Basis
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