Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today’s technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, the unemployment rate has been increased drastically when
compare
to the olden age because most Change the form of the verb
compared
of
Change preposition
apply
companies
dependent on highly advanced Add an article
the companies
machineries
for work. Presently, only around 50% of duties were carried out by human beings. The below paragraphs provided Change the wording
machinery
types of machinery
pieces of machinery
with
examples Change preposition
apply
how
technology impacted Change preposition
of how
todays
generation.
Earlier, there was no development in electronics and mechanics, whole activities Change to a genitive case
today's
was
performed by Change the verb form
were
the
group of Correct article usage
a
people
to complete the projects. For example
, construction
of Correct article usage
the construction
Correct article usage
a building
building
required numerous Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
employee
, to load and unloading of bricks, cement and some more items to hand over from Fix the agreement mistake
employees
ground
to Correct article usage
the ground
top
floor job was done by Correct article usage
the top
people
. Hence
, excess man power
requirement was taken by Correct your spelling
manpower
organisation
. Add an article
the organisation
Moreover
, as years passed gradually companies started to implement instruments to carry out huge activity these activity
Change the determiner
this activity
these activities
hence
people
scared
Add a missing verb
were scared
about
Change preposition
of
lossing
Correct your spelling
losing
Correct pronoun usage
their job
job
so altogether made Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
Correct article usage
a commitee
commitee
Correct your spelling
committee
for
against Change preposition
apply
to
implementation. Change preposition
apply
Thus
, technology bought major
reason for Correct article usage
a major
Add an article
an individual
the individual
individual
to leave as jobless.
Insecurity in Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
work place
culture is increasing all in countries by each day. Correct your spelling
workplace
While
comparing to traditional
period the rate percentage of Correct article usage
the traditional
population
is more. Another instance is Add an article
the population
production
procedure Correct article usage
the production
carrying
out in pharma industries where from the stage of sampling of material Wrong verb form
carried
upto
packing was processed without stopping of Correct your spelling
up to
operator
. Hardly five to six Add an article
the operator
an operator
man
to be Fix the agreement mistake
men
work
inside the manufacturing area. Once the container is empty automatically cleaning procedure will be done by itself. Wrong verb form
working
Further
computer came across all manual documentation initiated in software. Add an article
The further
Hence
, according to
current
Correct article usage
the current
population
Add a comma
,population
the
unemployment is more.
In conclusion, the number of Correct article usage
apply
people
getting opportunities in the organisation is very less due to
development. Thus
, I am agreeing with the statement.Submitted by aishwaryarkunnummal on
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