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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagrams illustrate the
man made
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process
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the process
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 of
cement
 production and the
concrete making
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concrete-making
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 process for construction purposes.
Overall
, the
cement
-making procedure includes several devices
such
 as
crusher
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a crusher
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, mixer, rotating heater and
a
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grinder.
Also
, there are defined
percentage
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percentages
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 of each raw material to produce good quality concrete.
As raw
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materials
 of
cement
, limestone and clay
is
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 used.
Firstly
, both these
materials
 go through a crusher and become powder. In the next step, the crushed limestone and clay are well mixed in a mixer and travel to a heater.
This
 heater intakes fire from a separate device and rotates continuously in
in
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order to heat the mixed limestone and clay properly. In the following stage,
heated
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 mixture goes through a grinder and becomes
cement
.
As
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 the final stage,
cement
 is packed in bags to deliver to the market. In terms of producing concrete, it requires four main input
materials
 (
cement
, water, sand and gravel).
Besides
, in order to produce
high quality
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 concrete, it is required to add raw
materials
 in
correct
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the correct
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 proportions. In
details
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detail
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, 15%
cement
 should be added with 10% of water to the concrete mixer,
while
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including 25% sand and 50% gravel.
Finally
, it should mix well prior to the use in
building
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the building
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 process.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, materials with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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