1.Some people choose a career according to the social status, or salary. Others choose a career according to their interests. So what do you think is the best what to choose a career? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Certain individuals select their major based on

the

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their curiosity.

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, other pick their profession

accroding

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according

to the money they will receive and their position in society.

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some people prefer choosing jobs they do not like just

becuse

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because

of the financial

resons

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reasons

, others do the work

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which

the

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have passion and earn much more. On the one hand, social position and

earning

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are very important because of the opportunities

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will bring to you.

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, doing something that you do not like will not make you happy. It will not bring you joy,

in addition

, you have

chances

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of getting burnout. One of

tutors

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chose to be a teacher

becase

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because

this

profession is highly respected in our country.

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she got her

majors

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in teaching biology, she is not

haappy

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happy

. She does not care about her status in society or even money, she wants to do something that she is interested in.

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, people pick the career they have passion

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because they are into that occupation. Human beings that do work that they love are

more happy

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and stress less because they do not worry about their salary or social position. They worry and care only about

themselfs

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. There are a lot of people in

this

world who chose their career

according to

the interests they have. Ken Jeon is a good example of it.

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the

beginning

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he was a doctor.

Doctor

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is one of the vocations that are highly respected and well-paid.

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, he quit his job and decided to be a comedian and an actor. Now he earns more than he used to and he

is still admire

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, even though he is not a doctor. In conclusion,

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want to say that it is

everyones

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own choice

according to

what they want to work.

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, mankind should

chose

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their careers based on their enjoyment, rather than

high

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salary and role in society. It is way better to be happy and enjoy

the

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life than be

reach

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and

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all the time and have constant

burnouts

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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344 words

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1.Some people choose a career according to the social status, or salary. Others choose a career according to their interests. So what do you think is the best what to choose a career? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.

Your opinion

In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

School Children should choose the subjects they study from a young age and stop doing subjects they find uninteresting. How much do you agree with this opinion and why? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays in many countries young people leave rural areas to study or work in cities. What are the reasons for this? Do the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

Stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this ? What solutions can you suggest ?