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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar graphs illustrate the percentage of people who passed their driving exam of two distinct groups (men and women) every ten years from 1980 to 2010 in an Asian country.5
Overall
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, the proportion of women applicants supersedes the number of men.
Moreover
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, for both sexes, 1980 was the year with less amount of passes. In
this
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 context, the female sex had a gradual increase between 1980 and 1990, whilst in 2000 the chart has shown a surge and in 2010 a slight decrease.
In addition
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, the male chart had a moderate rise, albeit, the lower percentage of driving test passes when compared to the opposite sex. The graph remained stable from 2000 to 2010. In
this
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 context, the highest approval of females was nearly 70%
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 the male was close to 50%
To sum up
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, women represented predominantly the sex of people who passed their driving exams between 1980 and 2010. In spite of that, females' lowest passing statistic is equivalent to the males' highest rate.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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