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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph illustrates the percentage of various
further
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 school qualifications in one European country by gender in a specific year.
Overall
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, the first existing degree after school which is a skilled vocational
diploma
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 is definitely more popular among males.
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 the undergraduate
diploma
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 is more common for women. There are three qualifications which usually get men rather than females which are skilled vocational
diploma
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, postgraduate
diploma
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 and master's degree with 90, 70 and 60 per cent. The biggest difference in the sex gap is seen in the first stage of education which is 80 %. The least common
diploma
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 for men is an undergraduate one with approximately 35 per cent. Women get undergraduate diplomas and bachelor's degrees more often with 70 per cent in the first one and 50 % in the
second,
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respectively. The rest qualifications accounted for 30 and 40 %,
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, a postgraduate
diploma
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 is the second less popular stage of education for females.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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