The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
The bar chart demonstrates information about the percentage of
household
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households
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in owned and
ranted
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rented
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rental
accommodation
in the UK countries including, England and Wales. The units are measured in percentage from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the amount of
household
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households
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in owned
accommodation
increased over the period shown.
However
, the same
figure
for rented
accommodation
followed a downward trend. Starting from 1918 to 2011, despite there was a
marginally
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growth to reach
peak
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the peak
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of 70 in the indication for owned
accommodation
from about 22. After that,
this
figure
experienced a reduction
around
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5 till the final year. Remarkably, ranted
accommodation
was the highest
of
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around 77 %.
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,
this
figure
witnessed a
sharply
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decline to reach a low of just under 30 in 2001. After that,
this
figure
increased by 5 in the final year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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