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The charts bellow show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts bellow show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie chart depicts the
percentage
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 of water used by six nations (North
America
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, South
America
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,
Europe
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,
Africa
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, Central
Asia
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, and Southeast
Asia
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) for three purposes industrial, agricultural, and domestic uses.
overall
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, the
percentage
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 of agricultural
use
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 overtook high figures for
percentage
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, on other hand, domestic
use
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 was taken less number
percentage
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. we can see three cities in
Africa
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, central, and southeast
Asia
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, have approximately figures in 80%, in the remaining area of North
America
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 and
Europe
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, a high
percentage
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 for the same purposes
use
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.
In addition
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, industrial
use
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 in
Africa
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 and central
Asia
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 is different by around 2%,
however
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 in agricultural
use
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 by around 4%, that’s the mean
percentage
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 in these two cities approximate for uses.
Nevertheless
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, domestic
use
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 in Central
Asia
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 and Southeast
Asia
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 has the same
percentage
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 7.
However
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,
Europe
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 cities less than
use
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 water
percentage
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 for agricultural purposes. The other parts of the world
use
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 less than a quarter. Domestic
use
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 is the least with under a quarter in
Africa
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, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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 and more than a quarter in North
America
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, South
America
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, and
Europe
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, america, europe, africa, asia, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Allocation
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
  • Industrialization
  • Domestic sector
  • Agricultural sector
  • Global trends
  • Water scarcity
  • Resource management
  • Technological innovations
  • Water recycling
  • Population growth
  • International cooperation
  • Water wastage
  • Sustainable practices
  • Water footprint
  • Resource allocation conflicts
  • Environmental impact
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