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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides information on the percentages of
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households owning and renting accommodation in England. and Wales, between the years 1918 and 2011. As
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can be seen from the chart, there
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 a
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significant
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the
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rented accommodation over the years.
On the other hand
, the number of households which own a house or apartment
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 has seen a drastic increase .
To begin
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 percentage of rented
accomondation
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accommodation
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 around 78 %, which
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 followed by a small drop of around 10 % in 1939 and 1953.
Then
, between the years 1961 and 1991, the numbers
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 to show a Steady decrease and in 2001 they
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reached
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 the lowest point of 31 %.
However
 a decade later, in 2011, there
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 a small rise in the numbers, reaching somewhere. close to 37 %. When it comes to the families living in their privately owned houses, it begins with
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 percentage of 22 % in 1918. and increases to 40 %, by the year 1961. 1971 is the only year with the same number of rented and owned accommodation. By 2001 the number of rented houses
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 to 70 %,
although
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decline of 5 % in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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