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The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990. Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990. Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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the bar chart illustrates the contribution of various factors to the Indian economy between 1950,1970 and 1990.
This
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 is clear from the graph that, in 1950 and 1990 the sectors has been fluctuated except in 1970.
According to
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 what is shown
firstly
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, in 1950 starting with industries which were 20 per
cent
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 and slightly increased in 1970.
While
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 it fell from 27 per
cent
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 to just under 20 per
cent
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.
Secondly
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, self-employment climbed dramatically from approximately 7 per
cent
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 to 36 per
cent
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 which was the highest percentage compared to the other features
in addition
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 to being the most contribution to the economy .
Finally
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, the service sector and agriculture had nearly the same ratio in the three years with 26 % being the highest proportion in the service sector and
moreover
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, agriculture hit a peak of 35%. In
conclusion
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 we can say that all the features assisted the economy in several ways ,
however
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, self-employment has been the most helpful.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sectoral contribution
  • economic base
  • industrialization
  • service-oriented economy
  • diversified economy
  • agriculture sector
  • industrial sector
  • services sector
  • economic policy
  • dominant sector
  • fluctuation
  • transition
  • shift
  • steady increase
  • decreasing trend
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